Sunday, July 13, 2014

Deep sea short

Something I had written in 2011 for a writing class:
Maxwell had arrived one year ago. He opened the doorway to the underwater paradise; however there was no water, and not a grain of sand in sight. Where he had seen glass hallways  and the endless blue of the ocean in his mind stood impenetrable steel walls with concrete supports and the only windows looking outside were one foot by two feet, scratchy, and hard to see out of. There were three main buildings; one building was the dormitories used for housing and food, another was the Advancement in Underwater Living Research  building, and the third was the Aquatic Life Research building.
            "I expected more excitement," said Maxwell, feeling uneasy at lunch, "why should we be living under water if everything's the same?"
            "It's the principle of constructing livable structures in unlivable places they are going for Maxy, not the adventurous, dangerous appeal you see in it," Claudia said, "maybe some adventure will still come your way."
Disappointment had already struck a few weeks earlier, after Maxwell made his time thieving descent in a windowless, brown carpet floored submarine. "I suppose I should just be glad for the experience…"he said.
            To hold some interest in his new home Maxwell had quickly learnt what all the different colors of lights symbolized; he even remembered which lights were in each room and favored the low frequency reds in the RADAR Tracking Stations. In most sections of the AULR building the light given off was more nutritious to plants and animals. Florescent lights were mostly used. The ALR building was strung up with LED lights; some rooms in here had three or four different colored lights in them. The typical yellow-gold lights were in the bathrooms and halls. Often accompanying these lights were plain white walls of steel that were brushed in a way that made them look wooden, along with a mixed-shade brown carpet. Maxwell's mind was eased to normalcy on his daily passes through the hallways that connected the private quarters to the Advancement in Research wing. The hallways reminded him of his first house, he favored the building. He disliked the hard, loud tile floors of the other two buildings, however he enjoyed the colors and daily happenings in each very much.
            "I feel closer to the plants and animals down here than I do the men." said Maxwell one night when he was eying some of the fish swimming around in a tank close by.
            "What are you talking about, kid?" asked one of the research supervisors.
            "People here don't seem to like to talk much," answered Maxwell, "that's what I'm talking about."
            "They all have their ways of getting by." said the supervisor, "They weren't as excited as you were coming down here."
            "That's probably because they knew what they were getting into…"
            "I like to think it's because they understand what makes good research," the supervisor continues, "they throw away their social skills for the good of science. We love it down here together, yet alone, in the dark."

I liked the way:

I liked the way
You walked with me
I liked the way
You talked with me
I even liked the way
You stopped with me.

I like the way
You grabbed my hand
I liked the way
Your eyes looked like sand
I liked how it
Was so unplanned.

I hate the way
You lied to me
I hate the way
You didn't try with me
I hate the way
You never found time for me.

I hate the way
You made me feel
I hate the way
You think it's no big deal
I hate the way
You weren't for real.

What are we?

I am a vision through your eyes
I am a voice in your ears
I am the skin that feels you, as you feel me
I am the aroma that surrounds me
I am made up of memories that you keep
You are the reflection of me in you
We are all there is

Tuesday, September 6, 2011

My Story

My story about my job at Papa Murphy's was lacking a continuous storyline. It was a good subject choice, but missed any sort of development with the characters. I hardly introduced my first boss, or the reason why he hated me. The story never got started, and consequently it did not end correctly. There were no smaller stories to connect or explain any of the events.

Hunger - passage


"I learned to understand Cezanne much better and to see truly how he made landscapes when I was hungry. I used to wonder if he were hungry too when he painted; but I thought it was possibly only that he had forgotten to eat. It was one of those unsound but illuminating thoughts you have when you  have been sleepless or hungry. Later I thought Cezanne was probably hungry in a different way." -Ernest Hemingway, A Moveable Feast.

I thought that Hemingway was very effective in recreating the feeling of hunger through this passage. With the way he made me feel when I read this, I knew that he had felt the same thing. The mystery left at the end of the paragraph feels sincere and leaves me thinking: in what way is Cezanne hungry? Is it a physical hunger or a mental hunger-- a drive?